Kate Sheppard Pt 3

These sentences are "sick". How could you improve or make them better?

Telling:  The woman pulled the world along a road. There was a city ahead. The sky was cloudy.

Showing: Puffing, the woman heaved the planet along a huge gravely road. Glancing up, the woman saw a huge magnificent city ahead. Cold and bitter, the clouds welled up and rain began to fall.

These are my improved versions of the sentences. They were fun to make and I hope you like them.